Comments on: Karaoke Quintessence: Chapter 1: Juju http://www.aaronrosspowell.com/kq/chapter-1-juju fiction and philosophy Fri, 26 Feb 2010 02:51:54 +0000 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.9.2 hourly 1 By: Aaron Ross Powell http://www.aaronrosspowell.com/kq/chapter-1-juju/comment-page-1#comment-139 Aaron Ross Powell Tue, 12 Aug 2008 19:07:03 +0000 http://www.aaronrosspowell.com/?p=115#comment-139 <p>Ah, okay. The stuff about the finger is probably necessary exposition, since that plays a big role later on. But I'm gonna do my best to get information out via dialog as much as possible, since that tends to be more fun to read -- and a lot more fun to write.</p> <p>Thanks for the feedback.</p> Ah, okay. The stuff about the finger is probably necessary exposition, since that plays a big role later on. But I’m gonna do my best to get information out via dialog as much as possible, since that tends to be more fun to read — and a lot more fun to write.

Thanks for the feedback.

]]> By: George Donnelly http://www.aaronrosspowell.com/kq/chapter-1-juju/comment-page-1#comment-138 George Donnelly Tue, 12 Aug 2008 16:09:45 +0000 http://www.aaronrosspowell.com/?p=115#comment-138 <p>I mean the parts between the paragraphs that start with the following fragments, inclusive:</p> <ul> <li><p>The driver smiled at him</p></li> <li><p>The streets were empty</p></li> </ul> <p>I'm not saying it's all bad, just saying it drags a tad compared to the paragraphs before and after it.</p> <p>hth</p> I mean the parts between the paragraphs that start with the following fragments, inclusive:

  • The driver smiled at him

  • The streets were empty

I’m not saying it’s all bad, just saying it drags a tad compared to the paragraphs before and after it.

hth

]]> By: Aaron Ross Powell http://www.aaronrosspowell.com/kq/chapter-1-juju/comment-page-1#comment-128 Aaron Ross Powell Sat, 09 Aug 2008 18:20:15 +0000 http://www.aaronrosspowell.com/?p=115#comment-128 <p>Thanks, George. By the bus part, do you mean just the couple paragraphs actually on the bus or the whole section between when Jimmy leaves the bar and when he meets Ellison?</p> Thanks, George. By the bus part, do you mean just the couple paragraphs actually on the bus or the whole section between when Jimmy leaves the bar and when he meets Ellison?

]]> By: George Donnelly http://www.aaronrosspowell.com/kq/chapter-1-juju/comment-page-1#comment-178 George Donnelly Sat, 09 Aug 2008 16:32:52 +0000 http://www.aaronrosspowell.com/?p=115#comment-178 <p>The ride on the bus drags a bit. I found myself wanting to skip over it.</p> <p><br><br></p> <p>The part in the bar carried my attention.</p> <p>It's an interesting start. So far it seems like a rather unique concept.</p> <p>Keep up the good work.</p> The ride on the bus drags a bit. I found myself wanting to skip over it.



The part in the bar carried my attention.

It’s an interesting start. So far it seems like a rather unique concept.

Keep up the good work.

]]> By: George Donnelly http://www.aaronrosspowell.com/kq/chapter-1-juju/comment-page-1#comment-127 George Donnelly Sat, 09 Aug 2008 16:32:52 +0000 http://www.aaronrosspowell.com/?p=115#comment-127 <p>The ride on the bus drags a bit. I found myself wanting to skip over it.</p> <p>The part in the bar carried my attention.</p> <p>It's an interesting start. So far it seems like a rather unique concept.</p> <p>Keep up the good work.</p> The ride on the bus drags a bit. I found myself wanting to skip over it.

The part in the bar carried my attention.

It’s an interesting start. So far it seems like a rather unique concept.

Keep up the good work.

]]> By: Aaron Ross Powell http://www.aaronrosspowell.com/kq/chapter-1-juju/comment-page-1#comment-179 Aaron Ross Powell Sat, 09 Aug 2008 16:20:15 +0000 http://www.aaronrosspowell.com/?p=115#comment-179 <p>Thanks, George. By the bus part, do you mean just the couple paragraphs actually on the bus or the whole section between when Jimmy leaves the bar and when he meets Ellison?</p> Thanks, George. By the bus part, do you mean just the couple paragraphs actually on the bus or the whole section between when Jimmy leaves the bar and when he meets Ellison?

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