Comments on: The Hole: Part 3

By: Xian B.

Xian B. — Tue, 11 Sep 2007 09:21:41 +0000

In my opinion, beginning sentences with “but” or “and” is a stylistic decision and not up for criticism outside of high school essays.

Here are some actual typos in the text, just search the page for them and you’ll see what I mean:

“obstacles to be methodological overcome”

“had insisted on they buy on the spot”

“before touching one one of the steaks”

Still reading. (A good sign.)

Xian B. — Tue, 11 Sep 2007 07:21:41 +0000

In my opinion, beginning sentences with "but" or "and" is a stylistic decision and not up for criticism outside of high school essays.

Here are some actual typos in the text, just search the page for them and you'll see what I mean:

"obstacles to be methodological overcome"

"had insisted on they buy on the spot"

"before touching one one of the steaks"

Still reading. (A good sign.)

Jeff — Mon, 03 Sep 2007 07:31:24 +0000

“The smell of the meat was fresh and new in a neighborhood gone quite.” <— Did you mean “Neighborhood gone quiet.” ?? Maybe I just read it wrong.

“..struggling through games of croquet. But this August had been silent and without those summer smells.”

You should try to not start off a sentence with “But.” Just add a comma and get your point out there or say “This August, however, had been….”

“…north. And this last week he hadn’t left the house at all.” Same thing here with “And.”

All in all, so far so good. Nice work.

Jeff — Mon, 03 Sep 2007 05:31:24 +0000

“The smell of the meat was fresh and new in a neighborhood gone quite.” <— Did you mean “Neighborhood gone quiet.” ?? Maybe I just read it wrong.

“..struggling through games of croquet. But this August had been silent and without those summer smells.”

You should try to not start off a sentence with “But.” Just add a comma and get your point out there or say “This August, however, had been….”

“…north. And this last week he hadn’t left the house at all.” Same thing here with “And.”

All in all, so far so good. Nice work.